Hello

The following pragraph is taken from a friend's website. Can anyone tell me what is wrong with it?

With over 14 years of IT experience from desktop support, network infrastructure and project management. We are the one-stop solutions center for all of your business and corporate technology needs.

Thank you!

This is tidier:

With over 14 years' IT experience from desktop support to project management, we are the one-stop solutions center for all your business and corporate technology needs.

A decent grammar checker would pick most of these up for you.