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are these correct

He arched his back, his eyes surging open.

He awoke in the desert, his ear encrusted with blood.

He awoke in the desert, blood encrusted his ear.

Re: are these correct

"He arched his back, his eyes surging open".

"He awoke in the desert, his ear encrusted with blood".

"He awoke in the desert, blood encrusted his ear".

The first two are fine, since the underlined clauses are subordinate. But the third one is wrong. It is an example of a "run-on" sentence. This happens when two separate main clauses are not separated by a suitable punctuation mark, like a full-stop or a semi colon:

"He awoke in the desert. Blood encrusted his ear".

Alternatively, the clause could be recast as a subordinate one:

"He awoke in the desert to find that blood encrusted his ear".


PaulM